Inchoate

I learned about my word from a variety of sources. In the article Hey Little Girl is your Daddy Home, the specific article dealt with The Amy Fisher Story, talked about the nieveness of girls because she allowed Joey Buttafuoco to talk her into trying to kill his wife. Only someone young and "dumb" could even consider doing such a crime.

The word inchoate means in an initial or early stage; incipient and imperfectly formed or developed (dictionary.com). In a book, entitled Statistical Science in the courtroom, the author talks about the early, beginning stages of trials in the judicial system. The author discusses processes and specific process involved in the premature stages in court.

Since the review of five sources, I've concluded that the word inchoate means the early,unprepared,and premature. I tried to find the word in the OED but I had difficulties looking that up, so I just used the GIL and other internet sources. There is not much else to go with getting the definition if the simple to word definition.

Nas

At first, i had a difficult time trying to find a good enough argument to make this paper about. My initial argument was going to deal with hip- hop activism, which talked about the creation of hip- hop. I realized myself after reading it thoroughly that a strong argument wasn't presented to I dropped that article in the junkyard to be recycled .My second idea dealt with the John Imus scandel and the degradation of African American women but i realized it was just someone stating the facts exactly how they had witnessed with little to no arguments being presented. After going to the writers studio, one of the professionals informed me that the topic wouldn't be big enough to write about. My tutor this time told me that it would be easier to get plenty of arguments out of hip- hop songs. She informed me that magazines and articles can have arguments but sometimes they are one- sided and a song is the easiest to do a paper like this. So she asked me for the name of a well- known hip- hop artist, i told her Nas, She googled "Nas lyrics" and the first song that came up was "I Can." I told her that song caused a look of positive controversy in the hip- hop industry a few years earlier. We then reaf the song and started identifying arguments and the elements of rhetoric. We then outline the paper and I went home to research Nas.

I looked at websites like VH1.com and imdb.com for his biography and album release dates. I looked at these particular websites because they are credible sources. They are no disadvantages of using this source, only advantages like accurate facts, no opinions.

Hip- Hop America by Nelson George

Nelson George was born September 1, 1957. He is an author,music and culture critic, journalist, as well as a filmmaker.He attended St. John's University in Queens, New York. He began working as a new editor for Billboard magazine for seven years between 1982 and 1989. He wrote two other books in the 80's as well as wrote in a column entitled "native son."He first got involved with film in 1986 when he helped Spike Lee in She's gotta have it. He has written 15 non- fiction books, including one best- seller entitled the Michael Jackson Story. He currently lives in Brooklyn, New York, where he continues to work by being a co- executive producer for VH1 and as a consultant for BET news. He made his directorial debut in 2007 in a film called Life Support, starring Queen Latifah.

I choose this author because he writes about real ordeals within the African American culture. He writes about the reelaationship between hip- hop and america. The postives as well as the negatives. He tells all about the contradictions and the negativitities surrounding the hip hop culture. I think this book would be interesting because it talks about how hip- hop has challenged and changed american society. It also addresses how and to whom that hip hop represents.

Dizzee Rascal

I decided to choose Dizzee Rascal, aka Dylan Mills,19, because I found his genre of music interesting. He has a certain style that is similar to that of American rap artists. In one of his songs that I listened to I noticed that the music video took place in a night club, which is currently the number one spot for hip- hop music videos to be filmed. It seems to me that he gets a lot of his style from the way that rappers present hip- hop over here.

Dizzee became popular at the end of 2003 in London. He won his first music award , Mercury Prize Award, for his debut album entitled "Boy in da Corner." He was raised by his mother on the East side of London, England. He had bery bad behavior while attending school, therefore he got kicked out of quite a few of them. Because he wasn't in school and underage, he got into a lot of trouble by stealing cars and robbing businesses. Music class, however, set him in a new and positive direction. He began making beats and tracks in the music room on the computers.

After observing songs from American MC's he developed his songwriting skills, and soon after became a member of the Roll Deep Crew. Their garage music was referred to as grime because it was so graphic and aggressive. His hit whit label song entitled "I Luv U" gained him national recognition and made a name for him as a grimy MC .Dizzee's first album was released in July of 2003. He was stabbed several times while in Ayia Napa, but recovered safely. His album was released in the U.S. in January of 2004. He has became an Undergroud King in London, but now is focusing on getting other young talent discovered. He released his second album in September of 2004, and a third in 2007.

Peer Workshop

I think that peer review went well. I enjoyed my fellow workshoppers. However, I don't think that I ever benfit much from the workshops. Most of the time my classmates tell me information that i already know because it's apparent. Most of my first drafts are rushed and shouldn't be considered the best i can do. All I get told is what i already know, like that I need to add more details and text and develop a stronger thesis. I beleive that my classmates feel the same way about this even though it's still good to get a different person to read your work. I think that the best benefit that i get is when i go to the writers studio. I think peer workshop should be changed to go to writer's workshop day. We are mostly freshmen non- english majors, so we can't really give each other many good tips to improve each other grades drastically. But like i mention earlier, I think that we can get a lot more accomplished if we had people with more experience then us to go over our paper.